Tuesday, January 20, 2009
Friend Prompt
Sometimes when you may be sad lonely or just need a friend you look for someone that is caring. Personally i would describe myself as a very caring friend. When my friends feel sad or depressed i stay and listen to them until they feel better. I also try to help them out by letting them know that i care for them. Most of the time i will stay up until 3 in the morning just talking to themselves. Another thing that describes me as caring is that when one of my friends is feeling sad i always feel really bad for them and try my hardest to make them feel all smiley. When my friends need a caring person i am always there.
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dear jesenia,
i liked your prompt it is a great peace of writing and your doing good staying on topic and i also like your intro but yu can do better on your conclution. well i dont know how you can do it better but you can
Hey Jesenia,
I like your hook and your supporting details and I also think you can work a little bit more with your supporting details to make sense better.
Sincerely your friend
Lesly.
Jesenia,
I liked how you stayed on topic. I think you have a good explanation on why you are a caring friend. I liked your conclusion. I think you should work on using some different words.
Dera Yeny...
i know that u r truely some1 that i can count on when i get sad and lonly CAUSE IT HAS HAPPENED IN THE PAST. U wrote a well story on how u r a good friend and it was a rockin piecs
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